tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23051453.post4316753189374382934..comments2023-11-02T06:57:11.400-04:00Comments on BookEnds Literary Agency: Query Critique #2BookEnds, A Literary Agencyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06287278822065839469noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23051453.post-86364616086636027982007-10-28T11:17:00.000-04:002007-10-28T11:17:00.000-04:00You've done a lot of good for me. Perhaps I shoul...You've done a lot of good for me. Perhaps I should post a before and after query?<BR/><BR/>Kevin M. ZabboAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23051453.post-22336150522166521782007-10-26T02:05:00.000-04:002007-10-26T02:05:00.000-04:00I disagree about the credentials. If a story isn't...I disagree about the credentials. If a story isn't good, there are no amount of credentials that will make it better. IMHO, the ending paragraph should be the beginning.<BR/><BR/>And then I'd do away with the lengthy description and replacde it with (a) who is Voza and (b) what challenge does she face.<BR/><BR/>On the genre question:<BR/>I have a 4th grade daughter. She doesn't read picture books much anymore, but kids generally like to read about kids who are a couple years ahead of themselves. I'd say a 2nd or 3rd grader would really enjoy this book. If you took this storyline and made it a YA novel or novella, you'd miss the target audience. <BR/><BR/>Learning a lot with these critiques Jessica. <BR/><BR/>JanelleJanelle Dakota's bloghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14863697259422839477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23051453.post-83792949500955223942007-05-19T14:14:00.000-04:002007-05-19T14:14:00.000-04:00I wonder shouldn't the genre of this work be neare...I wonder shouldn't the genre of this work be nearer the opening? Suppose the agent/publisher can't accommadate any more books in that genre, or has a colleague who can better represent and hand it off. A real time-saver. <BR/><BR/>Plus, wouldn't the author wish to list her credentials, thereby suggesting a possible platform. 'I've been writing professionally for years with 'Mickey Mouse Fandom Magazine'. Then if the author has no other credentials put in workshops, crit. groups, etc.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23051453.post-54662085814422823372007-05-17T21:23:00.000-04:002007-05-17T21:23:00.000-04:00Picture book featuring a fifth grader? Doesn't sou...Picture book featuring a fifth grader? Doesn't sound right to me. Fifth graders are 10-11...that's at the very least middle grade but could also be younger YA (young adult) as well.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23051453.post-66136826048616315992007-05-17T15:33:00.000-04:002007-05-17T15:33:00.000-04:00Thanks so much! Your critique has really helped!Thanks so much! Your critique has really helped!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23051453.post-37433313470717356222007-05-17T15:27:00.000-04:002007-05-17T15:27:00.000-04:00I liked the ending too! It was direct and straight...I liked the ending too! It was direct and straight to the point.written voizehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11231300046763608092noreply@blogger.com