tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23051453.post9115048280410278858..comments2023-11-02T06:57:11.400-04:00Comments on BookEnds Literary Agency: Query Critique: Science FictionBookEnds, A Literary Agencyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06287278822065839469noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23051453.post-12758911395093329312015-06-05T12:36:08.828-04:002015-06-05T12:36:08.828-04:00If it involves dragons and fur-clad people, this m...If it involves dragons and fur-clad people, this makes me think it's more science fantasy - or just plain fantasy (like the Pern novels) - than science fiction.<br /><br />Not knowing the MC's name - unless she's referred to as Speaker the entire novel - also seems a bit distancing somehow. I don't really know what's at stake for this character or what the true source of conflict is :(Suzannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06288802923434609582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23051453.post-47018992536482527802015-06-05T03:00:12.769-04:002015-06-05T03:00:12.769-04:00Thank you for your share. I found your website per...Thank you for your share. I found your website perfect for my needs. It contains wonderful and helpful information. I have read most of them and got a lot from them. Keep Blogging! For writing tips visit <a href="http://cheapessaywritingservice.us/" rel="nofollow">buy cheap essays</a> you can get better help.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12435672394088382640noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23051453.post-64486284408580733422015-06-04T20:50:22.116-04:002015-06-04T20:50:22.116-04:00It definitely sounds like a book I'd at least ...It definitely sounds like a book I'd at least read the first couple of pages of if I was standing in the bookshop, but I'd really like more specifics in the 3rd paragraph. Expand on the lies, slavery etc. I'm sure your word count would allow another paragraph in there =)AJ Blythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04529233142099749005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23051453.post-32717284496939538292015-06-04T14:19:00.052-04:002015-06-04T14:19:00.052-04:00I agree that this query sort of works but doesn...I agree that this query sort of works but doesn't stand out. It's possible you might get a few agents requesting pages, but since I'm not an agent, I can't say. As a reader, I might pick up the book and skim the first few pages to see if it draws me in.<br /><br />I think you're trying to be too coy about what species Speaker is. I'm guessing she's human, but it's just a guess. I need to feel more connection to her and her specific problems. This line: "She will face lies, slavery, and interstellar politics at the hands of her biological kin, and hatred and accusations of blasphemy from her adopted relatives" is very generic.<br /><br />I think the query would work better if I had a clearer idea of the story basics. What does Speaker want? Who is trying to stop her? In what way(s) are they trying to do so? What is at stake? What will happen if Speaker fails? Answer these questions as specifically as you can, and the story won't sound generic and done to death.<br /><br />This looks like it could be an enthralling story. Have the query show that, and you'll get much more enthusiastic responses. Good luck!Elissa Mhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10727748060605823895noreply@blogger.com